Beyond The Legend

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Leoni Dias

Leoni Dias

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Hi guys, a months ago I wrote The Old GT-R, but my PS2 broke, and I stopped the history. Now, I create Beyond The Legend, I hope all of you like.

*Sorry about any English error, I'm brazilian.



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Beyond The Legend

Chapter 1: The Return Of The Legend Part 1

- Hey, What is this sound?
- He is approaching very fast!
- Wow, very fast...I've never see something like this!
- Oh my God!!!



- I don't beleive it!
- ?
- Shadow!
- Shadow? Who the hell is he?
- Incredible...
- Dammit, who is he??
- The best racer we had in this area.
- Wow!



- He is the Fabio's brother!
- Really, friend of Siel?
- Yeah, he backs, we have to look for Fabio, he needs to know...





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- ?, Who is he?



- What the...A black NSX?
- We don't know any black NSX in this area!



- ****!! He is stupid fast!
- Oh...A Race uh? Hahahah let me see the level of racers here



- From the outside? Nevermind!
- Haha!



- Yes, It will be from the outside



- 🤬
- ...



- Who is he? He passed Kevin very easy.



- !!!
- ...



- He is coming!



- Really extremy fast, but...
- Move man, Move!!!



- I'll show you the power of a GT-R
- Yes man, show the power of this!



- Sugoooooiiiii!!!
- Nice!



- ...
- Your car is good man!



- !!!
- What the **** is this??? A RSC in a street race?



- Ooooops!
- Puf! Just an amateur!



- I think there is one more!




- ?, Who is he? I thought I've already won this race!
- I found you!



- Come on man, come on!
- Let me see if you can follow me!



- Where is he?



- Nooo
- No way man!



- Let's try the revenge!
- ...



- ......I'm driving here about years, I've never see this car!
- Sorry man, Practice more!



- I'll try again!
- What are you doing kid?



- Dammmmmm!!!
- !!!



- ****! My car!! I'll stop here!



- Woaaahh, This place still the same since I got away!







- Hey brother, I back, and we'll get out of here togheter. You, me, and Sied.




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- Look he is coming!!
- Sugooi, he is the first!
- Go Shinigami, go!







- Yoooshaaaa!!
- Nice Fabio!
- Thanks Sied!



- Hey why you stop?
- Wow, I'm very tired man! I need to go to that place!
- Yes, WE need to go there, he also was my friend!
- 5 years today...
- ...


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- ...He was here...He said to me: "Don't be a street racer please"...Entered in his NSX, and went...
- I don't no why he said it to me, he was a street racer to...
- "Take care of him Sied, I'll be back in 5 years", he is late huh...
- ...Where are you Ichi-nii?
- ...Hey Fabio, let's get out of here, the police will come...
- Ok Sied, drive it for me please, I'm really tired.
- No problem, I got it!

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- Yeah, It still the same to. This place, these buildings, these lights...
- I said to Sied years...Im' a little late...



- ZzZzZzZzZzZ
- Waaaahhh!
- Oh dammit, I slept a little!
- I'll go home and sleep a little more, I have to look for my brother!



- Where are you Fabio?...Where are you Sied?


Thanks for read! 👍
 
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Bueno. Cute story, almost Need for Speedish. Seems like a mad case of overkill, tho. :)
 
Not a bad effort. 👍

One thing though, if you can't tell a story without the need to litter it with partially edited profanity then you shouldn't be posting it here. 👎
Use the 🤬 smiley in place of such words if you must. :)
 
Chapter 2: The Return Of The Legend Part 2


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*****In The Morning*****

- Oh it's here, our home, I hope you are there Fabioo.



- I'll park here...Oh very nice, Mr. Ita's shop is open, I thought that he already had died, I'll talk to him...



- Hi Mr. Ita!
- How do you know my name?
- It's me Mr. Ita...Neal!
- Nearu? Is this really you?
- Sure, I came back yesterday
- Neaaaaruuuu, nice to see you again, it's been a long time!
- Oh Yeah, and I arrive late 2 years.
- Oeh Nearu, you're looking for your brother, aren't you?
- Yeah Mr. Ita.
- Oh Nearu sorry, but he doesn't live here anymore.
- Oh I understand, but do you know where is he living?
- Not exactly, I know he is living in a apartment near the Stage 5
- What??? Is he racing there?
- Yas Nearu, he is a street racer now.
- He is pretty fast!!
- Damm, and about Sied?
- Sied is living with him, he sits in the passenger seat now, every night.
- I said to him: "Don't be a street racer". But It's ok, I'm not dissapointed.
- He drives a Blue S13.
- Nice!! Sied drives his white impreza?
- I don't know, Fabio doesn't know that Sied was your partner in Street Races.
- Hmm...Ok, does he have a nickname, like me?
- Yeah...Shinigami!
- !!!
- Oeh, Nearu, do you want a cup of coffee?
- Yes Mr. Ita, it's been a long time...
- Hohhohu!...




*****After a few hours*****

- Nice Mr.Ita, I need to look for my brother now!
- Ok Nearu, good luck!
- Thanks Mr.Ita, thank you very much for everything!



- Shinigami, Huh? Nice Fabio!



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*****Stage 5 - 23:00*****



- Will you race today Fabio?
- Ok Ok Sied, if you really insist!
- Hehehe, so let's g...
- Fabio, Fabioooo!!!
- ? , What happen Miro?
- I was racing yesterday, suddendly, a black NSX appeared, he races with us, he wins very very easy!!
- !!! , Explain me this!
- The NSX appeared suddendly, I think he was testing us, it's all!
- Hahahaha, he's still the same
- What are you talking about Sied?
- Er...Uh...Nothing Fabio, I was just kidding!
- Neal......He'll watch me this night, I have to race!
- If you say...so Let's Race!!!!!!
- Oh Damm, I'm a street racer and he...
- Don't get mad Fabio, don't get mad, he'll appreciate your skils.
- You are really crazy Sied...Get in the car!



- Yaaaaaaataaaaaaaa!!!





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- Shinigami!!!



- Damm I hate wagon cars in races!
- Hahahahaha!



- No way man!



- Come on Shinigami. come on!!
- ...



- Uaaaaa!!
- 🤬!!!



- !!!
- Ahh, Nooo!!



- Hahaha, you los...
- Pay attention Fabio!
- Not yet kid!



- Damm!!
- Not too easy huh?



- Don't forget I'm in the inside line!
- Ok, no way!



- Move man!
- Wow! Pretty fast!



- This is fast!
- !!!



- Damm, I'm really fast!
- Brake man!
- It's my last chance !



- Uaaahhh!!
- Idiot!!
- ...



- Ufs!
- No way to me today!
- Hey look Sied, a very nice German car but...



- No way to him!!
- Woww! What the 🤬 is this S13?






- You lose!
- Nevermi...



- See you!
- Im...po...ssible!



- You look better today Shinigami, what happened to you?




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- Who's driving this car? Oh Shadow!! Shadow!!



- You are Miro right?
- Yes!
- I'm waiting for him at Brooklin, he knows where it is.



- Is he winning?
- I don't know, they are coming!
- Ok bye!
- Bye!





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- Sugoooiii!!!
- Go Shinigami!!!
- Nice race!!!
- Go Nuke!!!Go S14!!!



- Fast!
- Fast!



- Damm I stepped on the brake much earlier!
- What are you doing?!



- Please don't hit me!
- !



- Noo, I miss again!
- Oh man, are you drunk?



- What the hell happened to me?
- Crazy boy!
- This is very strange!



- ...
- I got it!
- You got it!



- Hey Sied, is he watching me?
- Hey man you've passed the finish line, calm down!



..........

- Wow, I'm really tired and... "A man comes to the car window"
- Hey Shinigami, Miro wants to talk to you!
- Ok, thanks! HE IS THERE SIED!
- "Are you really there Shadow?"





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- Where is he Miroo???
- Calm down, he is waiting for you at Brooklin and...
- Ok Thanks!
- "So you are here my friend."



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*****Arriving at Brooklin*****

- Hehehe niceeee, my brother is here!!
- hehe, I can't believe it
- !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
- !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



[Getting out of the car]

- Anikiii!!!
- Shadoow!




The old scenes backs to the future!!

Next Chapter: Memories




Thanks for read! And comment please! 👍
 
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Overall, this is a nice story. But you should keep an eye on your spelling. I've found some mistakes and corrected them for you. Here we go:

- Nearu? Is really you? -> Is this really you?

- Oh Yeah, and I arrive late 2 years. -> I've arrived two years too late.

- Oeh Nearu, are you looking for your brother, aren't you? -> You're looking for your brother, aren't you?

- Oh I understand, but do you know where is he living? -> Do you know where he's living?

- Sied is living with him, he sit in the passenger seat now, every night. -> sits

- Nice!! and the Sied's white Impreza? -> Sied drives his white Impreza?

- Thanks Mr.Ita, thank you very much for all! -> Thank you very much for everything!

- Hahahaha, he still the same -> He's still the same

- Don't ged mad Fabio, don't ged mad, he'll apreciate your skils. -> get, get, appreciate

You look better today Shinigami, what happen to you? -> happened

- Who is this car? Oh Shadow!! Shadow!! -> Who's driving this car?

- Damm I steped on the brake much earlier! -> stepped
- Hey man you are in the finish line, calm down! -> You've passed the finish line

- Wow, I'm really tired and... "A man comes in the car window" -> A man comes to the car window

- calm down, he is waiting you at Brooklin and... -> He's waiting for you at Brooklin

- hehe, I can't beleive it -> believe



Keep it up! 👍
 
Don't worry about your grammar, Leoni Dias. Ever watch a Kung Fu flick? With a highly dubbed soundtrack? That's what this reminds me of.

Not everything needs to be so damn perfect all the time. :grumpy:
 
Beyond The Legend Chapter 3: Memories

*5 years ago*

- Look there!
- Wow!
- Shadow!
- Nice man, he is the best!
- The legend of Stage5!



- Is he really good?
- Yeah sure!
- Nice! tonight he get out of here with us!
- Ok boss!











- Ok let's do it!...



- Nice again Neal!
- Haha, thanks Sied, but it was easy!
- Oh Excuse me! I'm looking for Shadow!
- Oh I'm here!
- Oh hi Shadow, you are very famous here , right?
- Hehe, yeah! (embarassed)
- I'm from Team Inferno, and I'm here to invite you to join in my team!
- Wow!
- Can you go with my team to other places and contries?
- Hey wait Neal...and your brother?
- Oh Damm!
- But Wait! How much time your team will travel around other cities and countries?
- About 3 years or more!
- I can enter in your team, but I get back in 3 years, do you accept?
- No problem! We are waiting for you near the Brooklin Bridge, Arrive there in 2 hours!
- Neal!! Are you crazy?
- Er...ok...ok! Ow Sied I got bored of this place!
- But you'll let your brother alone here!!



*At Home*


- Are you sure Neal?
- Yeah man, this is my dream! Please, take care of Fabio 3 years for me.
- Oh man I don't know!
- Will you abandon me Aniki?
- I received a great invite to drive around the world Fabio, I need to go! It's my dream!
- ...I can't beleive it!
- I'll be here in 3 years, I promise! Fabio...



*Near The Brooklin Bridge*


- I'll never understand you!
- Don't say it, one day, I'm sure you'll understand me!
- I'll take care of him Neal!
- Thanks my friend!
- Fabio, please......don't be a street racer! Don't be a street racer!!
- !!!
- Ok Aniki! I got it!
- I'll be here in 3 years! Bye Fabio! Bye Sied!
- You really are crazy Neal!


When I got in the NSX, I thought I was making a mistake...But when I start to race in that places...It was my real dream...
3 years after, we continued to race, and I couldn't back, It was wonderful.
1 year after, and I couldn't continue doing that without a real friend. I was living alone, I felt lack of somebody on my house.


1 week ago I've decided the get out of there, and back here to see my friend and my brother again!

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- Now I'm here guys, to invite you to race around the world with me!
- Really??????
- Really??????
- Sure...Our dream is the same, we have to do it togheter!
- Yaaaataaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!
- Heheeee, this is really niiiceeee! (T_T)
- But first of all Fabio, I need to take care of your car!
- Uh?
- Yah Fabio, Neal is right...your car isn't to good yet!
- I need your car about 1 week
- Ok Aniki, take care of him! Don't forget it is my first car!
- Haha sure my brother!
- So, I have to take my Impreza!
- Wooo, I'm ansious to see Sied's Impreza! Hey Sied, does you have a nickname too?
- SnoW!
- Hey guys let's have a dinner, I'm hungry after all!
- Ohh...not a bad idea Neal...Let's go!




Next Chapter: The Weak S13




Thanks For Read! 👍
 
Hi guys! I hope you enjoy the new episode!


Beyond The Legend


Chapter 4: The Weak S13


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*1st Day*

- Let's try it!



- First of all, I have to test the suspension, the brakes, and the tyres.



- Ahhhhhh!!!



- 🤬 tyres!! (Pushing the handbrake)



- Ok, let's start it again! I have to remember that I'm not im my car.



- The speed in light corners is good!



- Hmm...the suspension is a little soft!!



- The suspension is MUCH soft!!!



- The brakes seem good!





- Eaahhh! It needs a better clutch and LDS to.



- These tyres are really really horrible!



- Let's test the engine and the transmission!



- ...Good.





- These tyres are annoying me





- 🤬



- I'll need help with this, and there's only one person who can help me!




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*2nd Day*


- Oh it's here, I need to buy many parts, I don't know if here has everything.



- Good morn......Neal???
- Hiiii my friend!!!! Maito, it's been a long time, are you fine?
- Yeah man, better than this impossible! And you?
- Nice! Hey, do you still selling car parts?
- Yes, Yes, I sell motorcycle parts to, but I know that it doesn't matter to you, right?
- Haha, yah.
- So...What do you want my friend?
- I need some S13 parts
- S13?
- It's my S13 brother.
- Oh, I got it! So...What do you need? Clutch? LSD? Turbo? Brakes?
- Everything!
- Oooh man!!
- Yeah, I need a Triple Plate Clutch, a Full Customizable LSD, a Racing Exhaust, a Racing Suspension Kits, a Full Customizable Transmission, and a Blitz Turbo Kit!
- Hmm...do you need tyres?
- It depends, do you have high grip tyres?
- No, no, I only have tyres for drift!
- Ok, no problem, put everything in the car please.
- Sure my friend! Hey Neal, will you tune this car alone?
- Nooo, I'll need help!
- Will you look for that man?
- Yeah, he is the only person who can help me, I have 6 days to tune it!
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- Ok Neal, you can go!
- Ok, thanks Maito! (Turn on the car)
- You're welcome my friend, It's good to see you again! Bye Bye!
- Bye!



- I hope he can help me!



- Hi Mr. Ita!!
- Neaaruu, nice to see you! Do you found Fabio?
- Yeah Mr. Ita, but his S13 is a little weak yet.
- Hohuohuhu!
- Mr. Ita, I need a favor!
- Ahh no Nearu, not again, I'm an Old man, I can't do this anymore.
- You said the same thing when you tune my NSX.
- Oh really, eh? (embarassed)
- Hehehe. Please Mr. Ita, you're the only person who can do it and...
- Ok, ok, ok Nearu, but you'll work on my shop.
- Yaaaataaaaaaa, ok Mr. Itaaaa!
- You'll have to open the shop at 7:00, and close at 18:00!
- No problem, after 18:00, I can help you!
- Ok Nearu, ok, put the car in that garage...at Six we start.
- Yaaataaaaaa, Thanks Mr. Itaa, I love you!!!!!
- Hohuohuohu Nearu, you still the same!





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- Mr. Ita, the car is in the garage!
- Ok Nearu, and the parts?
- I'll take it on my house.
- Ok, arrive here before 6 o' clock uh?
- Sure Mr. Ita, sure.





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*3rd day*

- Oh Nearu, where's is Sied?
- Nice question Mr.Ita, I said to him to get his subaru out of the garage.
- Hm...I think he is taking care of his car!
- Maybe...



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*6th day*





- Oka, Nearu! It's over!
- Really? Do you already install the aero and the new wheels?
- Yeah, It's ready to race, come here and see it!

(Getting out of the shop)

- Woaahhhhh Mr. Ita, this is nice!!
- Hehe thanks Nearu, this is the best part of my work!



- Now you, your brother and Sied can race around the world!
- Thanks thanks thanks thanks Mr.Ita!!!!!!
- Haha, I do this for me to, I felt good doing this!
- You're the best Mr. Ita!
- Take a ride man!
- No noo, I haven't finished my work yet!
- Ok Nearu, so, I'ts my time to help you!
- Ok!
- Hohohuhuhuhohu!!



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*****Stage 5 - 20:00*****


- Thanks for everything Mr.Ita...



- Let's do it!! Wow the sound looks good!





- Hehe, let's see the new engine powa!!



- Suggoooiii!





- Let's test the new tyres now!



- Nice! The suspension is MUCH MUCH better to.



- The exhaust sounds are so good!



- I can push it hardly!









- Let's test the tyres now!



- Sugoooiii!!



- The aero don't let the car slide!



- Uahhh, full torque now!!!







- The car is ready to everything, now we only have to defeat the "Elite" and get out of here...
- And where are you Sied? I hope you're doing good!





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- Uahhhh! It's been a long time since I 've decided to stop race!
- Hehehe, Don't ged mad Shadow, but I'll defeat the Elite alone, and finally
we'll get out of here.








Next Chapter: Sied: The Crazy Boy


Thanks for read and comment please!👍
 
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Nicely done my friend.

And I once had those exact wheels on an S13 Silvia :lol: Mine was black though. Same wing too I think.
 
About 6 million pictures too many for my taste, but whatever works for you. I can't even rid this stuff... sorry :-\
 
Hey guys, thanks for the comments, here's 1 more chapter :)

When you see "~" in the begin of a phrase, it means the dialogue is
a phone call.



Beyond The Legend


Chapter 5: Sied: The Crazy Boy


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- If I remember, the Elite will come tonight.
~ - Hey Miro what's up?
~ - Oh hy Sied, what do you want?
~ - The Elite will come tonight?
~ - Yeah, they will arrive here in 30 minutes, and I don't have any race to put you and Fabio.
~ - They?? The crew 3R ??
~ - Yah!
~ - And where's Cobra?
~ - He's already here, but he won't race tonight
~ - Ok ok, I will race with the 3R crew!
~ - Are you crazy Sied??? Fabio can't defeat the Elite!!!
~ - It's not for Fabio, It's for me man! Meee!!
~ - You?????
~ - Yeah yeah, Can you do this for me?
~ - Er...Just a moment Sied...
~ - Ok ok...

(about 3 minutes later)

~ - Hey Sied, you can race...
~ - Ohh nice, thanks Miroo
~ - The race will begin in 25 minutes...Arrive here at the time.
~ - No problem, I'm already near of Stage 5
~ - Ok Sied, good luck for you my friend!
~ - Thanks Miro, bye!
~ - Bye!




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- Hey guys, I received a message!
- A message? But the race will start in 20 minutes!
- "Sied is here with his Impreza, he'll race with you guys!
- Damm, Sied returned to race?
- I think yes man, there's no Impreza like that one
- Is this a problem?
- I don't think so!
- Hehe, nice so let's go there now!
- Ok ok, lets' go!
- Wooo, nicee!



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- Yaaataaa, Let's do it!












- Those guys are extremely fast, I have to use all my experience and ability!
- Damm, I've already lost to Shadow, now Sied is behind me!





- Your car is fast, but...
- Damm...



- With a minimun effort, my impreza pass it in the corner!
- 4 wheel drive...No way!



- That R34 knows that the race today is between me and the 3Rs



- Ok, I found the bosses!
- Come on Sied, come on!



- Ahh, I'll hit my car man!!
- Hahaha, are you scared?



- UahhhH!!!!
- Ridiculous!



- You are close to me, but this is all you can do in the straights Sied
- ...



- I'm worried.



- Time to attack!
- Damm, he is fast!



- You lose!
- What are you trying to do?



- You saw me trying to put my car in the inside line and closed me up, but I steped sightly on the brake and put
in the inside line of the other corner.
- Nooo!!!



- He is coming, I have to win in the corners, the transmission is regulated for maximum torque in the
corners, if he is able to follow me in the corners, he'll pass me on the straight.



- I have a different way to do this part!
- ...



- What is this?
- ...





- Uahh!!!



- Let's decide it in the straight line
- Move my car, move, I need you power now!



- Uahhh, I can win!
- Uahhh, I can win!



- !!!
- !!!



- 🤬
- 🤬



- Yes, yess, I got it!
- ...



- With this ability, you are able to defeat the "Cobra" to.
- Good race...




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- No you will fell the power, Sied!







Next Chapter: Bye bye Stage 5!

Don't miss it!



Thanks for read and comment please!👍
 
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Nice new chapter, Leoni Dias :) Love how this story is proceeding and how you make it interesting. 👍
 

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