Canojo no Porsche - Chapter 1, 2, 3 & NEW 4th chapter. 5th coming soon

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This is stroty abou man, which life and fate connected with car of RUF. Intro is rather simple and even i think it seems boring, but its just Into. I write it to make everyone know how all began.

Chapter 1. How all began.( Intro )
It is hard to go through life in several ways simultaneously
Pythagoras

Born enigma of HER.
Being in the last grade of high school, Huan* was the son of a radio-engineer. Well, he thought his dad was an engineer. He had second a life as like a member of the Triads. Most members of Triads couldn’t have a family, they especially couldn’t have a growing son. Huan was 16 when the heads of Triads recognized that his dad has a son. It was cloudy Nankin’s * day, when Huan’s father crawled at home with blood spots on his body and on the head. Triads gave him the last chance to see home, in fact they didn’t kill him on the place, to make him suffer more. Who knew he is such a strong guy who had enough energy to crawl home. Huan’s eyes cought some strange movements in the hall, when he had seen his father, he only could hear a silent mutter. Dad told him – they burned everything I’ve earned, and only one thing was left. The right to own her belongs to you. And that moment, his heart stopped beating. After funerals, Huan was the only one guy lived is a big flat, so he decided to move from Nankin to Tokyo, Japan, looking for better life without revolutions, repressions, wishing forget all sadness. He only knew that his father will be forever in his heart.
And only one thing he was concerned about was HER, something female as he knew from father’s words. The worst thing was he didn’t know was - who killed his loving father and who was his father in real life. He was clever enough to get, that father couldn’t be killed because of mistake in his new engineering project.
*Nankin (Chinese-Nanjing) is the capital of province Jiangsu in China.
*Huan (Chinese – happy)


Coming to Tokyo.
In 1995 Huan sold dad’s flat, also he sold useless antiques to the black market, which was enough to move from China and start his new live in the country of rising sun. Maybe this character was inherited from mother.
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In the middle of the summer his Flight 888 landed to the small international terminal of Yokohama city, from where he hitchhiking came to the Tokyo university campus where he was going to live. On the highway he was pleasant to look at pink flowers of sakura growing near neon lights, mountains and harmony of nature. He missed it in Chine, where was age of reforms, and more then all he was shocked of strange cars, riding on a high speed passing by his bus. All he could see, they were low, with evil sound from the exhaust pipe and letters Option (オプション ), on the rear plate. As his new friends told him, he came to Japan in cool times, boom of supercars. Time when all domestics auto-companies produced fast supercars, time when thousands of import tuners and just great cars were imported to Japan. During childhood in China, cars could be owned only by politicians and by Triads *. In additions, cars were very poor and too ugly, like socialism was. So he didn’t find any interesting in them. But in this day all began to change in his new life. During his education, lots of his mates had their own cars, not only cars, they were lucky owners of Nissan Skyline 31 & 32, Toyota Trueno, Mazda RX-7 and such rare and expensive cars like Toyota 2000GT. More rich boys and girls owned such babes like Ferrari Testarossa, 512BB, Lotus Special 71, Porsche 911 Targa etc.
Room in his hostel was small but very comfortable, actually only having wide concepts of order, he made it so. Luckily he was not adopter as gaijing*, he was asian, so looked like native man everywhere. On the book shelf, first kind of books after “economy of Japan course book” and “quotations of Confucius” were Option magazines and other printed magazines about racing. Every Sunday he went to the Daikoku Parking area, watching drift and drag shows, chating, drinking, well, he had fully loaded student night life. In addition, Daikoku was near famous Wangan Higway. Huan was crazy about all this. As he wasn’t lazy, he worked a lot for money. Working is in his blood, idleness was king of sin for him. Of course money was to race. His 1st car AE86 (Hachi –roku) didn’t require big sum of money for gas and for keeping it, so Huan could save his money for acquired dream: after great researching in auto world he interested in Stuttgart auto manufacturer – Porsche. Partying in Daikoku, he didn’t waste his time for nothing, by this time he already had some abilities of driving, and he practiced during some races on the streets of Tokyo.
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By the time Huan finished university, he decided to start looking for a new wheels, his 86 became old, and give way almost for every another car. Furthermore, his passion (his dream) like Huan thought, changed to true love. And In 2002 year he saved enough money and had huge luck to buy recent made … (continue in the next Chapter)
*Triads – Chinese mafia with Chinese ideology.
*Gaijing - japanees.- stranger, alien.
 
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Being a grammar nazi and a perfectionist for years, I'll right away say that you have to correct some stuff in your fanfic before getting slapped in teh face. :P

A good start, looking forward to more.
 
Being a grammar nazi and a perfectionist for years, I'll right away say that you have to correct some stuff in your fanfic before getting slapped in teh face. :P

A good start, looking forward to more.

what would u correct, mate? ) want to hear Ur advise
 
what would u correct, mate? ) want to hear Ur advise

Oh, so you want to know?

Everything's correct, just some minor spelling errors. Especially "Triada", coulda sworn it's "Triads". Read your opening chapter again and find out for yourself what needs to be edited. 👍
 
Being in the last grade of high school, Huan* was the son of a radio-engineer. Well, he thought his dad was an engineer.He had a second life as a member of the Triads. Most members of the Triads couldn’t have a family, they especially couldn’t have a growing son.

I think that's what uMadson meant.
 
Obviously there are. I don't have the time to correct it all right now and I don't want to clog the thread either. That was just an example.
 
sorry guys, ill tri to fix it. Next chapter is coming soon ( during 2 or 3 hours )

Nah, it's okay. Just don't rush it and take your time. It's good that you go over your chapter like two or more times before you publish it so that you can correct almost every error possible. ;)
 
Try writing it up in Microsoft Word, the spellchecker will find your mistakes. Great start BTW. 👍
 
Chapter 2. live in Tokyo.
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Huan's ride. Mastering of high speed.
Huan was training to drive his new one RUF (Originally it was Porsche 997 tuned by RUF) after work at night. Traffic was too heavy in day time, and because girl lost their mind seeing his painted in Aqua Blue Titan Pearl Metallic RUF. ^_^ rushing under the highway, passing through steep turns at city speeds under 100 km per hour, he felt the power and maneuverability brainchild of German Engineers, gentle roar of the engine, only at that time of non turbo super car. Sound of original exhaust forced passers-by to puzzle over what it was for a car. Lap by lap his time at one of the favorite track of racers was getting better and better, it was a time in complete freedom, nirvana. When body of driver becoming un-separable unit with a car.
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Huan liked from what Japanese policeman were made. They watch how another driver do race, look for discipline during meetings, if they see drivers are not monors, policeman even can discuss their rides and take videos of racing. It wasn’t despotic China, where u could be jailed into the prison cuz of saying your own opinion about something serious. He still couldn’t even realize how such different countries could exist the same time. Japan was parallel world, mirror reflection of China.
And pharaohs never tried to catch Huan’s Porsche, she (his car) was too fast for them’s stock Toyota Crown. But 2 guys on classic JDM saw him driving through Aniot tunnel on speed of about 100 km/h and cought his eyes in the rear view mirror by flashing lights.
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They didn’t see his RUF before, as well as he. Without the slightest hesitation, he realized what they want. Standing side by side they have agreed for 5 laps race.
Immediately after launch, approaching the tunnel, Juan broke into the lead. He knew that almost perfect weight distribution during the race plays an important role, but did not think that much. This gave him the chance to take a turn without hindrance at the maximum.
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Being wildcat driver, on the 2nd turn after first tunnel Huan abruptly hit the brakes to create a smokescreen in order to slow down its competitors. But as appeared driver on S2000 was well preapaired.
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At the end of the second lap Haun saw that S2000 of the recent strength rests on his tail, and therefore the output on the main straight he gave him way, and then pressed the gas pedal to the floor. Rebuilding is the first line to second, then from the second to first, he appeared in both rear-view mirrors of his rivel, and as a result, rival on Honda began to enter the tunnel too fast and overbraking went into a skid and gave Huan a primacy.
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Last 2 laps he did without any fussiness and won this race. At the finish he said to him self – if it was NSX Type R, he would have to work really hard.

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But whats up with Huan’s private life?
Being 25 years old man, he had a soul-mate named Lili. They met each other on one of the Daikoku meeting of Skyline owners.
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This time Huan already had RGT, he just came for meeting as a spectator, and in hope of race on Wangan with any of Nissan.
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They both were adults and Lili was from reach family of nuclear physicist. In sun rise they arranged their first date on the next weekends.
On the next weekends:
Lili and Huan had a great time on Shibuya, partied in shop, bars, learned about each other. Everywhere could be heard cheerful voices of noisy companies. Going under hundreds of neon posters, they noticed DMC band* acts at one on of the Shibuya’s clubs. Fortunately they both were rock fans \(m)/
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Leaving “Black Lagoon” club they headed to Shibuya station, it was almost 5 am morning time, and they had to get up to work.
On the road to station the returned to dialogue about their concern, Lili owned silver Nismo GT-R based on R33’ 95. She loved this car after seeing news report of racing in 24 hours of Le Man.
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It wasn’t the fastest R33, and of course it was slower then RGT, but Lili being a girl, liked shaped if this Nismo, her wide body kit, she liked story of production it, and as a street racer, she liked FR drive for drifting! Some facts: Nismo GT-R had 2.6 L RB26DETT DOHC twin-turbo I6, 305 PS (224 kW). Racing Modification took part in 1995 and 1996 24 hours of Le Man race.

In autumn they decided to moved to new flat on Ōta*, near Huan’s office, where Huan did work.
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By this time they already have for one another tremendous feeling, and their hearts were bound by ties of love and passion. They became couple of racing lovers. Lili could only dream about it during school time. But as we know, dreams have a habit of incarnate. After long brooding both made a decision of rent a flat, not to buy. Who knows, maybe another one dream of travelling will incarnate either.

*Ōta - One of 23 wards of Tokyo
*DMC – Detroit Metal City. Metal band from Manga comic
*actually omen when cat enter new flat or house first was born in Russia. It must bring happiness and safe.


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Yeah, I envy your Photoshop touch. Maybe I can be like you, it's just that I didn't gather ideas. Anyway, keep at it because it's what keeps the fanfic unique. Me gusta. 👍
 
Still liking your unique photo's with and without captioning. And so far, this fan fiction seems promising, and like it will become pretty popular. Keep it up. 👍
 
Great chapter, I can read through the grammar errors (no offense intended).
 
Chapter 3. Relaxing before the working storm.​

A week later Huan and Lili finished equipping their apartment in Ota.
-Huan, what about the trip out of town? Almost the last days of summer, and we are due to all the hustle and bustle never raced together and enjoyed the beautiful scenery of the suburbs of Tokyo.
-Hmm, I do not mind. Just two of us ... Have any proposal where to go?
-Who's the girl me or you?! This I would like to hear from you where to go! > _ <
-What about a trip to Mitsudzava? I've been there a couple of times, and also rented there for a drivers license. I know every bend of there road.
-Well, I have to rely on you, darling. You're not able to pick a bad place to stay, aren’t you?
-I drive a Porsche, I never do bad solutions. By the way, I'm afraid we only have enough money for gasoline, furniture in the apartment had eaten all the money!
-It does not matter, main thing we have gas and a snack. The working week in order and there that would work out of the last forces x_x
-Stop talking! Jump into your GT R and let’s gooooooo!

Arrived to Mitsudzava.
-Looks like birds came to see us!
-Looks like they wanna escape once heard roar of Your Nismo's 2.6 litre Turbo engine!
-Heh, speaking of the turbo, I think this 150 more horse power I’ve earned after installing brend-new Turbo kit are only hinder.
-Really think so, Lili?
-Yep, *sad smile*. Driving on the road course they’re really superfluous.
-What about wangan? What will u do on Wangan without extra power?
-U know, I’m actually not big Wangan fan, my car is made for taking turns!
-ok, let’s talk about extra power later, now come on the track, honey.
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-Huan, u did well!
-Really? Yep, but it was just great luck, Ur engine is faster then mine. It’s indisputable fact.
-Well, now stand up on the roadside and look at me. I wanna show you my skills id drifting!
-How long have you studied drifting, Lili?
-Since I’ve got my first driving license.
-First? What do you mean? 0_0
-Sooth to say, now it’s my third ones license *grin*
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-God! Should you kill a lot of time on the stylist before you make a picture! You Look great here, I fell in love again!
-You confused me! *hesitating*
-Ok, go on the road, show yourself like if you take part in purple-bull xXx-games !
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-Cool, Lili, just cool! Never saw you drifting, very good for girl! ^_^
-That for the damn discrimination!? U think girl only can cook?!
-No no no! just joking xD
-aha, joking =\ …. What about lunch?
-mmm, cooked by Yourself ? looks appetizing
-And tastes even better, I assure you, the recipe of my mom.

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Returning home, they have decided to throw the turbine from Nismo, as Lily said it interfered not only in the city, but also in the drift, but if the case is urgent, install in again won’t be difficult, because she has a faithful companion and helper - Huan
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The next morning, went out of his office, Huan, headed into the cafe for lunch, and saw her ...


*purple-bull xXx-games – fantasy remake of red-bull x-games, you know, copyrights etc. =)
 
Great chapter, I just find it hard to understand sometimes.
 
Chapter 4. Randezvous #1.

After lunch, Juan all day arrived in a state of shock and memories. Though he had long forgotten about his past, but that day it caught up with him in a strange way, and his father's words haunted him.
That evening Huan told Lili about everything.
Lili - why did not you fail to mention this? I think your father would not matter what you forgot about it. At least it is not polite.
Huan - Stop, I want to forget the past. Besides, it's just maintenance, you never know what it could have been caused. And even more so why have you suddenly latched on to the Porsche that I've seen?
- And what was the reason of maintenance, plate of rice and vegetables?!
-All can be. And it's just a coincidence.
-Randomness is not by accident. Remember that.
-Lily, you're talking like a philosopher. Let's forget it and have dinner.
-OK, but if it happens again, you must tell me about it. If so, we are waiting for a very mysterious story
-Hmm ...

On the weekends.
Huan - Hey, what about ride on the RUF on Wangan? Have not ridden with the breeze, all the work but the work takes it all the time.
Lili - we must move to Australia, I heard the people there are not much bother it, do some work and have a rest =)
-It does not matter, take your brand bento* and eat. If possible, I will not go to the limit, just want to enjoy the sights and sound of the engine.

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Returning home.
Lili – Don’t worry, if you met him for a week 2 times as much, so he is someone local and we'll find him. I asked around among my friends, suddenly they know it.
Huan - I hope so, but in this case, we would heard about him at least. His car is incredibly fast.
- I can’t believe this is happening. Is it something about what my father said .... nonsense. It can’t be, already passed more than 10 years, I changed my country ... it's just a coincidence.
-Do not eat lest yourself from within. If so, we’ll know, and if not, soon you two will be in good friend-relations. All Porsche drivers love their auto "brothers".
-I think you're right, it's time to sleep. It’s great that tomorrow is Sunday.
-I do not think that your assumption is impossible. Well, you said that so many years have past. If a person is destined that fate, it will happen. Today I am not much philosophizing? ^ _ ^
-ZzzzZ ....*dreaming about Tottori
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-You are so quickly cut off!? And to whom I'm talking here!?

... Continued in the next chapter

*Bento (弁当 bentō?) is a single-portion takeout or home-packed meal common in Japanese cuisine. A traditional bento consists of rice, fish or meat, and one or more pickled or cooked vegetables, usually in a box-shaped container.
 
You shouldn't be asking yourself the question of, "Is my story good enough?" If it's good enough for you to enjoy, then it should be good enough to post.

Also, I've heard of a manga called "Canojo no Carrera." Is that where you got your inspiration from?
 
well yes, and wangan midnight also..and other movies. Actually i'm big fun of Porsche since chilhood, so Canojo no Carera played not big role =)
 
BlackBird. Somehow the initials of the license plate look like there's an easter egg in the game. :lol:
 
I like those quotes in the pictures! And I am a big fan of Porsche too. :)


EDIT: Also, it's not "Gaijing". It's "Gaijin". ;)
 
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