Desire to Succeed: CHAPTER 2 (Warning PICTURE HEAVY!)

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Since my 'Downfall of a Legend' fell down the ****ter, I decided it was too all-over-the-place. Today I bring you a new, over-the-top story featuring not one, but 6 main characters! The arrogant and dangerous gang known as the Dieu garde (French for God's Guards) are rising in power in America, and these characters believe this must be ended. I present my newest project; "Desire To Succeed", beginning with a brief intro for each of the 6 characters.

Zach (AKA ZDUPH)
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Born: September 18th, 1985
Origin: Swansea, Massachusetts
Car of Choice: Bright Yellow Evo VI T.M. Edition '99
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Info: Born to a poor family, Zach was forced to work 3 jobs at the young age of 17, until at the age of 21, he moved out of his house and founded a small auto shop. One day, a huge corporation stopped at his doorstep and offered to "Promote" his business. Zach gladly accepted, and became rich within 2 years. This Evo VI was originally scrapyard material, until he and a group of friends restored it and modified it according to Zach's style. His life turned sour when on October 14th 2009, his shop was burned down by the Dieu garde. Unfortunately his brother was inside at the time, and was crushed to death by a lighting fixture. Zach is now out for blood, and seeks revenge on those who took his brother's life away.


Cassandra Medeiros
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Born: June 4th, 1989
Origin: Berlin, Germany (moved to America at the age of 9)
Car of Choice: Hot Pink SL55 AMG '02
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Info: Cassandra may be a hot sketch, but deep down inside, she has the heart of an angel. Her sister passed away from throat cancer when she was 13, her father was killed in a head-on car crash when she was 15, and her mother was drafted into the U.S. ARMY when she was 16. Currently living with her aunt, Cassandra looks after her aunt every day. Cassandra inherited her parents' money, and used it to purchase a used SL 55 AMG '02. Her boyfriend was a custom bodyart designer, and he transformed Cassandra's ride into an 800+HP beast. Her life changed when in 2010, her boyfriend was brutally beaten to death then hanged by the Dieu garde. She had no choice but to leave her dying Aunt to fight the evil souls that killed her one true love.

Corey Delgado (AKA Crazy Corey)
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Born: February 10th, 1978
Origin: Topeka, Kansas
Car of Choice: Ivy green 430 Scuderia '07
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Info: Born into an incredibly rich family, with a bustling limo business and private cruiseliner service, Corey had nothing to worry about when it came to money. Corey began to take steroids when he was 23, and has the infamous "Roid Rage", as he goes insane when someone messes with him. In 2007, his life turned upside down when his parents were killed by a car bomb, planted by the Dieu garde. He seeks to take down the gang that messed with him and his family.

Harvey Walker Jr. (AKA Evil H)
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Born: April 30th, 1965
Origin: Manhatten, New York
Car of Choice: Black Mustang GT Premium Package '07
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Info: Originally a part of the Biker Gang "Devil's Apprentices", Harvey knew there were only 3 things he needed in life, a bike, a girl, and drugs. In 1988 he was promoted to Vice President of the gang and eventually President in 2007. His biker buddied stole this black Mustang GT and gave it to him as a present. His biker status was ended when in 2008 the Devil's Apprentice Clubhouse was blown up with the entire gang still inside, except for himself. Who did it? None other than the Dieu Garde. Harvey aims to do anything in his power to do the same to the Dieu Garde, for his career, his reputation, and most importantly, for his dead friends.

Kevin McReary III
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Born: November 21st, 1984
Origin: Waterford, Ireland
Car of Choice: Lime Green C4 Coupe '05
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Info: Not much is known about Kevin. He rarely speaks, but when he does, people will know it's him. His car, a Citroen C4 Coupe '05, may look rediculous, but in reality it's a 190MPH machine that will leave it's mark on any turf. He vows to take down the Dieu garde, for reasons unknown.

Bruce Lepage (AKA The Evil Emo)
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Born: March 16th, 1991
Origin: San Francisco, California
Car of Choice: White Skyline R34 Nur '02
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Info: Bruce was once an ordinary child, born into a rich family, and lived an easy life, until his friends turned him into what he is today, a cold-hearted gothic teenager. Oddly his favorited color is black, yet his car, a 2002 Skyline R34, is white! Bruce wants to make a name for himself, and wants to impress his friends by taking down the Dieu garde, who have already risen to unbelievable strengths. Can he do it? Who knows.

That's your 6 characters folks! Tune in tomorrow when part one hits the shelves of Race Reports!
 
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Damn the Dieu garde are very evil people, good prologue though!
Seems to be a very intresting story!
 
Nice how you impllemented the Driver pictures:tup:

*AND HOW DID YOU GET THAT CARBON HELMET?!
 
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machate man I won it from the Fiat 500 expert event, but the chosen helmet is random. Add me and I'll dupe it to ya. :)
 
Is Kevin McReery any relation to the infamous McRearys of Liberty City?
 
Darn I didn't think someone would notice. Yeah he was supposed to be a 5th brother. Shame I forgot how McReary was spelt. I'll change that.
 
Great characters, can't wait for this one 👍 Reminds me of Queensryche's Operation Mindcrime Part II with the whole seeking revenge part
 
Hmmm cool.

Cassandra's another chick that leads the pink revolution in fanfics. :p
 
Nice work here, I like the beginning to the story. Looking forward to the next chapters.
 
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It was a dark and dreary night in Darlington, as Cassandra sat by her aunt's bed, watching her breathe through a mask.
Everything okay, Auntie? You seem tired. Why don't you rest, and I'll see you tomorrow.
I'm fine my dear. Just let your ol' auntie rest...
She then fell asleep.

Suddenly Cassandra's cellphone beeped, as if someone sent her a message! This is what it said:
Just wanna let you know that your boyfriend looks good hanging from a tree! Your friends, Dieu garde.
Cassandra was silent. Was her boyfriend really dead? She desperately tried to contact him, but it went straight to voicemail, as if his phone was shut off. She then recieved another text message, only this time it was a picture of her brutally beaten and shot up boyfriend. She dropped her phone and began to cry. Her one true love, taken away from her, by a group of evil gangsters. Suddenly she slammed her hand down on the table next to her. Enough was enough, she was tired of all the teasing, all the bloodshed, and all the tears. She said to herself "I'm sick and tired of this bull****!! I'm going to take them ALL down, once and for all!"

With that said, she ran outside and jumped into her pink SL 55 AMG. Tires roasting, she sped off. Somehow she was able to use the text messages sent to her by the Dieu garde to locate one of their secret hideouts. However, it was hundreds of miles away. She didn't care one bit, all she cared about was sheer revenge.

About 4 hours later, Cassandra arrived at the hideout. She quietly exited her car and walked slowly up the staircase leading to the door. Her fist was clenched so hard in anger. When she opened the door, a guardsman saw her, and performed a surprise knockout punch on Cassandra.

She woke up, and found herself sitting in a pit lane on a race track. She'd never seed such a track before. Suddenly she felt a smack on her left cheek, and a big jacked up man grabbed her by the chin. He got close to her.

What the hell are you doing here, trespassing on out turf?! You trying to start something?
Get off me you dirty bastard!
She shoved him off of her.
Alright, very well. How about we race? You, me, and 14 of my teammates! You lose....you die. Got it?
Fair enough! I'll show you what my baby can do!
[Pointing to her SL 55]What? That hunk of scrap? You'll be lucky to beat one of us, slut! It's on!!

They all lined up. Cassandra was amazed by how many of the same car there was.
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What the hell are those things? Some failed NASA designs?

Drivers! Start your engines! And you in the pink car! Prepare to die!

This was it. Cassandra tightly gripped the steering wheel of her car.
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I can do this...I can do this! May god's spirit guide me through this race.

The race started, and the back tired of Cassandra's car lit up in smoke!
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She worked her way up the field, overtaking a Dieu garde member every second!
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Suddenly the whole field slowed down to enter the first corner, but thanks to her boyfriend, who worked at Red Valley Racing, she didn't have to hit the brakes yet!
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Is this a joke? Or am I really winning already?!

She flew around each corner, leaving the pack in the dust.
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That ain't no ordinary SL 55! That thing's left us sucking on her fumes!

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Oh yeah baby! You all got showed who's boss!

The rest of the race was a walk in the park...
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She rounded the final corner and headed for the finish line...
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Bring a better ride next time, a**holes!

END OF CHAPTER 1. Chapter 2 coming soon!
 
Nice, but what happened after the race?
 
Oh my god... That font, it's... sparkly. :lol:

Anyway, great shots, like the great sense of speed panning mode 3 gives you.

Oh, wait, forgot to mention the story itself.
Um, nice story. ;)👍
 
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The clock on Corey's Ferrari read 8:30PM as Corey neared the starting line of the street race he entered.
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Damn, if it weren't for that ****ing traffic jam on Route 7, I would've been here HOURS ago!!

He then noticed a bright yellow Corvette stingray, which also entered the race, speeding away.
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WHAT THE HELL?! THEY STARTED WITHOUT ME!!!

He caught right up with the 'Vette...
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...and immediately overtook him on the first corner!
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DAMN YOU STUPID GUIDOMOBILE!
HAHAHA IDIOT! You really thought you had a chance???

Corey closed in on an RUF RGT.
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It may be a spiced up Porsche, but it has NOTHING ON MY BABY!

He shot right past it on the inside.
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SCREW YOU BUDDY!
Hey dork, you left your brakelights on!! YEEHEE!

He caught up and quickly overtook a '90 ZR1 Corvette
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Fair enough, but I'll get you back on the straights!
Lemme know how my exhaust tastes!!

An Aston Martin DB9 Coupe attempted to block Corey, but Corey swung right around him!
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Dammit! Nice one dude!
You sir, are a failure in a tuxedo!

He caught up to a Bugatti Veyron.
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Damn that's the fastest production car in the world! I'll be lucky to pass it!
You have not one bit of a chance against my...

Corey shot past him mid-sentence.
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Oh...crud.
Keep talking! Maybe you'll be in last by the time you're done!!

He closed in on the two remaining racers.
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I've got you in my sights!
No! This can't be happening!

But it did happen.
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****!
Only one to go, both in losers and laps!

He closed in on the leader, a silver Jaguar XJ220.
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You ain't goin' NOWHERE WITH CRAZY COREY ON YOUR TAIL!
This isn't fair! Look at the aero this kid has!

Corey flew by the XJ220 laughing away.
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He approached the finish line.
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There's...no chance for me now...
YEAH BABY! CRAZY TAKES THE WIN AGAIN!

And so he did, finishing 1st and collecting $400,000 in cash!
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YEAH BABY! 400K! THANK YOU UPDATE 1.10!

Later that night Corey was heading home on a quiet and deserted Route 7.
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I'm kinda hopin to do something interesting to end the night.

He then caught sight of a speeding Supercar. It was a Dieu garde member!
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THOSE BASTARDS KILLED MY PARENTS! I'LL SHOW THEM THE POWER OF CRAZY COREY!!

He chased down the Dieu garde member, until the member made a surprising U-Turn heading towards the highway exit!
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****!!! I'M LOSING HIM!!

Corey sent his 430 Scuderia into a wild 180 degree drift, and continued to pursue the member.
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He then saw the member exiting the highway and heading for a huge glass building!
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Corey followed as fast as he could.
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Corey watched from a backroad as the member entered the building.
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Corey slowly approached the building, keeping his 430 Scuderia revving as quietly as possible.
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What the hell is this place??? Looks like an Airport runway!

There he saw the huge building standing before him.
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I gotta find a way inside...somehow...somewhere!

He managed to find a small gap between the building and the ground and squeezed inside. There he found the member's car, sitting there charging with a huge cord connected to the wall.
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He slowly unplugged it, which unlocked the doors to the car. He quietly crawled inside the car. He pulled out his phone and called a friend of his.
Yo Derek! I need you to pick up my 430 Scuderia! It's off Route 7 at a Airport Hangar. Thanks.
He started up the car. It sounded like R2D2 waking up, only 10 times louder!
Let's see how these French fags like it when I steal one of their prized possessions! WHEEHOO!

The car launched at a breaktaking speed. Corey aimed for one of the glass walls.
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HERE WE GO!

He smashed through the glass wall, and drifted out of the hangar, heading right for the highway onramp!
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SEE YA LATER IDIOTS! AND THANKS FOR THE CAR!!!

Sorry for so many pictures, but hope you enjoyed reading this! Stay tuned for Chapter 3!
 
I don't mind the multitude of pics. 👍
 
I really like the creativity in this chapter, nice work. 👍

But I'll just ask, how have you though about the events leading up to for example the murder of Cassandra's boyfriend. It just feels like the reader jumps right into the act of revenge for actions we do not know much about. Why did they burn down the shop?

But it's just me complaining on the little things. :lol:
 
Liking the beginning of this story. I actally find it funny to see a bunch of GT by Citroen Concepts all over the place because they're all the same. Makes it look like an alien invasion :lol: Also liking Corey's actions with the GT by Citroen, just driving out without a care in the world through the glass :D
 
Nice. Having many pictures is good. Consider resizing them to save space though. Just a thought.

I don't think I like Corey though. :lol:
 
I like this story, it's pretty sweet.
Corey kind of reminds me of Brucie from GTA IV. lol
 
I like this story, it's pretty sweet.
Corey kind of reminds me of Brucie from GTA IV. lol

Thanks, and yeah, Corey's personality was inspired by Brucie. I loved his random outbursts of excitement, and his rudeness towards others.
 
Good old auto theft of million dollar Failed Nasa designs, liking the story, keep it up 👍
 
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