UK Pro Logic - Chapter 1 and 2 (Character Biographies soon)

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This is a fan fiction that I had an Idea to do. Since I cancelled the other one I decided to do a new one, why not?

Prologue

Hi. My name is Kurt, Kurt Murphy. I am 19, live in London.
Here is my... beautiful... or not... house.



"No Charlie! Don't touch that!"
Oh, who lives with me. That is Phil, Phillip Murphy. He's my brother and he's 29. He's the only one at home who has got a car, though shares it with everyone.
"Ok, dad! What will I do then?"
And that is my nephew Charlie, Phil's son. He's 5 and takes a life watching kid shows on the TV.
But there isn't only family.
"When someone throws a stone to you on the street, turn yourself, take a block and throw it too" Everyone laughs.
That's my mate, Terry. He's 19 and loves to create new jokes. When he says something that isn't a joke, it's very normal.
"Na na na na, na na na na, na na na na, na na na na, na na na na, na na na..."
That's Maggie, my female best friend. Margaret loves to sing, but she likes cars. She's 19, lives with her best friend Abigail.
"If you find something... It's need a thing... Blah blah blah what am I saying?"
That's it, Abigail. She's 19 and has got black hair though it was originally brown. She laughs very frequently.
"All I need is to... forget... what you said when I heard that you said you hate me!"
She loves to create love sentences, and she never gives up if she fails. That's a strong woman, that's Lolla! Oh by the way, she is 18, almost 19.
"Burned tyres!"
Me. And my frequent expression.

Chapter 1 - Oops!

I was just on my computer, searching for tracks nearby. Until I saw this on my screen...

Auto Trampoline. First race today. Watch out of the jump!

"Sporty suspension! Auto Trampoline?!", said I.
"What?", asked Terry, confused.
I turned to Phil.
"Go watch TV!", protested Phil.
"I'm watching Noddy!", answered Charlie.
"Phil, please, can I borrow your Lancer? To race today? Just a bit, at Auto Trampoline.", asked I, pleased.
"It's alright.", confirmed him.
So I took the old Lancer off the garage.

At the track...


"Phil was very nice to let me take his Lancer."
"I must be going full out!", though the GTO driver.


"What a huge slope.."
"Dude..." the GTO driver yelled. "This is sick!"


"So much climbing!"
"Ah, an old Lancer. Just crap." said the Ibiza driver.


"What? A 300SL?"
"Ah, you're not going easy on me!" screamed the Integra driver.


"A jump? How exciting!"
Ah, that's the jump!

I brake to avoid crashes, but the Integra hits my rear at full speed and I fly... Though I didn't gone off the track.

"No!!!!!!!!!!!"
"Oops!" laughed the Integra driver.

The Lancer crashed on another two crashed cars.

It almost hit a fence. And anyway, I was ok. But the car not. It was on a scrapyard.

A week later, the track was closed due to its high jump - it was going to be removed.
Phil wasn't that happy.
"Now I haven't got a car!" He had an idea then. "Hey! I know a guy that sells cars in Germany! We may go there!"
"To Germany?"
"It's two days to go and come, I think."
We then decided to go.
"And me?"
"Oh, don't worry. I'll call Sophie, your baby sitter, and she will come here. We wait for her."
And then Sophie came.
"Hello, Phil. It's to be with Charlie?"
"Yes, please. Two days, 90 pounds?"
"Alright." She gives five to Phil. Turning to Charlie. "Want to play, Charlie?"

We all leave... taking a plane to go.
After a while, we finally arrived at Germany.
"Hello, Lolla? Earth to you?"
Lolla wakes up. "Ah... We are in Germany?"
"Yes!" shouted everyone.

End of Chapter 1.

Chapter 2 - New Cars

We were in a little road.
"We need to wait. He's always here at this time."
Then, a 135i arrives.

"Oh, hello Phil!" He looked at us. "They all need cars?"
"We do, Roy. But we don't have money."
"Don't worry! Get in!"
"All of us?" we all shouted.
"Why? Are you obese?"
We then entered.
"Let's go! 98 km to go!"
So many...


Later on, at the showroom...

"It's already night. Nice showroom, although."
"Thank you, very much."

"Now, for the cars. We have a Mazda MX-5."

"Oh! I love it! What's the price?"
"None."
"None?"
"It's a gift! To all of you!"
"Thank you!"
"Let's check the keys... Toyota, Nissan, Peugeot, Mazda, here it is. Mazda MX-5 for Maggie!" He gives the keys to Maggie.
"Next, we have a Suzuki Swift"

"I want it!"
"All right then... Toyota, Nissan, Peugeot, Suzuki, here it is. Suzuki Swift for Terry!" He gives the keys to Terry.
"Then, we have a Mini Cooper S"

"Like it. Can I have it?"
"Of course! Toyota, Nissan, Peugeot, Mini, here it is. Mini Cooper S for Lolla!" He gives the keys to Lolla.
"Now we have a Nissan Micra"

"How cute! For me!"
"The keys await! Toyota, Nissan, here it is. Nissan Micra for Abigail!" He gives the keys to Abigail.
"The next car is a Peugeot 307cc."

"Elegant, beautiful, and in my favourite colour. It's a little bit heavy, but light reduction always works."
"Key almost there! Toyota, Peugeot, here it is. Peugeot 307cc for Kurt!" He gives me the keys.
"And me?"
"There is still a Yaris parked near the sofas."

"Oh, my wife likes this car. I'll take it!"
"I'm so proud. Toyota, here it is! Toyota Yaris for Phil!" He then gives the keys to Phil.
"Thank you!" We all thank him.

Then we return to the airport.
"Park your cars inside the train's port, please." Said the plane revisioner.
And the plane goes off, back to London...



End of Chapter 2.
 
Shame about the old Lancer...
 
"Elegant, beautiful..."

When was a Peugeot any of those things?


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Ok, this one is:

peugeot-908.jpg
 
Wait. 1. How do you fit 7 people into a 1 series.
2. where did you take the picture of the 135i?
 
Nice story so far. 👍
One question though, why are they all getting free cars?
 
When was a Peugeot any of those things?


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Ok, this one is:

peugeot-908.jpg

I like the 307 and the 206.
(and a bit of the 106, it's cool.)

Wait. 1. How do you fit 7 people into a 1 series.
2. where did you take the picture of the 135i?

1. They aren't fat... They can make a bit of 'cheating' :sly:
2. Something in Ahrweiler, that you win by getting silver on AMG Academy Beeginer

Nice story so far. 👍
One question though, why are they all getting free cars?

TY...
They got free cars because they were really in the need of a car.
So, like Roy Siemens was a Phil's friend, he gave those cars that were never bought in a lot of time. (or something like that :sly: )
 
A Dome Zero flipping over, a 300SL, a huge jump that can never be allowed to be part of a racing series, a trip to germany, free cars...
Oh my.

I like it.
It's a bit chaotic, but work on it and it could become your style of writing.
I think you should go a little slow. I mean you introduced us to tonnes of characters, destroyed a car, had the characters fly to Germany and introduced 6 cars.
All in 2 short chapters.

Just some advice.👍
 
I like the madness, all the things that wouldn't happen for real, keep it up, just try slowing it down a bit. As Apokalipse said you introduce a million characters in about 10 lines, they've wrecked a car in an awesome fashion. They all go to Germany and get cars. Just slow down a bit, other than that, I like it
 

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