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I had to write a fictional story for my English 9 class, and i wanted some touge action. I know that some of my turns are wronge, but my teacher is dumb when it comes to anything like this. Well here it is, vote on how much you liked it.
FRESHMAN STUDENT GRADED
Story by:
Bailey Groutage
Ms. Gordon, Period 1
“The Fight”
“You can’t just take away my agency!” Ryosuke shouted. Ryosuke Nakazato was a teenager of 18 years, 1.89 meters, 76 kilos; He had a slim body, oval shaped face, not chubby at all, and fair, even skin tone for being Japanese. His eyes had this extreme deepness to them, but behind the wheel of his RB25det powered Nissan Skyline R31 GTS-X he was a man of instinct and endurance. His father replied” Ryosuke, when you live here you can’t be a leech! You have graduated high school and you only have a Two hundred fifty thousand Yen in the bank,” (1 dollar is equal to 120.5 Japanese Yen, so Ryosuke has $2000) Ryosuke walked into the small kitchen and rinsed his hands, then in a normal tone
“I don’t need a bank statement, Dad” then under his breath he said “screw this, I’m leaving”
“Go then, you are never going to get anything because you won’t shape up, get a job and get an education.”
Ryosuke gathered his clothes and a few belongings, smashed them into his backpack.
“It’s not like I need you to survive, you always tell me the Nakazato family thrives, and I won’t waste my time sitting around here.” With that, Ryosuke popped his trunk chucked in his practice tires and left his dad in a cloud of tire smoke. The smoke looked very white because it was -3oC on this cold November morning at the base of the Irohazaka touge.
“The Runaway Boy”
From Ryosuke’s dwelling, it was about 8 kilometers to the local American’s house. Andrew Miller: 22 years, 1.86 meters, 80 kilos; he had a long face complimented with a strong jaw and large brown eyes hidden behind large, thick framed rectangular glasses, makes fun of little kids, works a full time job as a physicist’s apprentice, and drives a Nissan/Kids Heart Sileighty (pronounced: sill-ay-tee) with a cat back exhaust and carbon clutch and crankshaft, (Sileightys came equipped with a specially tuned SR20det). When Ryosuke arrived at Andrew’s house, his Sileighty wasn’t in his driveway, Ryosuke was about to leave when he heard an SR20det amplified by a large exhaust. Andrew was conservative with his tires and slowed gently like any normal driver.
“How’s it going Ryosuke?” Andrew said in Japanese, Andrew knew very little Japanese, but Ryosuke was fluent in English and Japanese thanks to Japan’s hard schooling.
“Uh… not so good, I kind of, um, kicked myself out of the house. My Dad says I need a job and extra schooling. Do you mind if I stay here a while? I thought I could make some money racing and doing odd jobs for people.”
“I won’t mind if you stay. You know you can’t make money racing! Actually, you are in luck; my parents just fired this person from their mineral spa in the mountain. He was looking in the women’s spas.” Then Andrew added, “Finally you put the RB25det in your R31 GTS-X, I heard it when I was coming up. You’re a little run away”
“I guess.”
“The Job”
Ryosuke actually liked his job at the hot spring; it was not as boring as he had thought it was going to be. Folding towels, checking temperature levels, adjusting water flow and assisting men and women who were lost or needed help reaching something. Though his first day was uneventful, he enjoyed the interaction with others, and the fact that he was proving his Dad wrong.
“Ryosuke!” Mrs. Miller chimed, “Your shift is over you can go home, you were great hun’, Andrew was right about something,”
“Thank you Mrs. Miller, I actually enjoyed working today.” Ryosuke got into his Skyline and took a grip run down Irohazaka’s one-way road, these were the same hairpins that he had done in Andrew’s car when he was sixteen not a legal driver. Now that he had gone to driving school and gotten his license, he could drive and own in his own car legally.
“Nighttime Touge”
Irohazaka was especially active tonight, the Akagi driving team was here to find the best racer, and set a new time on Irohazaka’s 20+ hairpins. When Ryosuke and Andrew arrived at the top of the Mountain Pass (Touge in Japanese), they saw that the Akagi Team had selected a driver that Ryosuke knew he could beat easily. He got out of his car and asked the leader to a one on one Touge Battle (race)
“Can you beat this guyre, kid?”
“Andrew, thank you for coming, I was the best one here but now that you arrived, kick their Akagi butts!”
“I suppose I could,” Ryosuke said and then added coldly, “You too”
“OK sir, we weren’t looking for trouble, we want to do a downhill run and since this is a one way road, we should do the lead/follow startup. We will lead if you don’t mind. If we get away, we win, if you pass us you win. We will switch spots after every run.”
“Ok, that sounds fair, but I need to get my tires from… well never mind, whoever said drifting was slow?” Ryosuke added cheerfully, he was glad that they were respectful.
“The Race”
Ryosuke was ready for the battle, work had refreshed him and he was all for a little butt whooping. He wiped down his engine and cleaned out his exhaust pipe, he did not want any backup or lost power from clogged exhaust. The other team was beginning to line up; he would be battling a red Ek9 civic, the engine sounded very powerful, even though it was running a factory stock exhaust pipe.
“Ryosuke, are you ready to own them? Remember what we practiced. Get it as far sideways as the corners exit, power out.” This was Andrew’s pep talk for Ryosuke and it made sense considering they had been practicing four-wheel drifts the last two months. Ryosuke pulled up behind this red Civic Ek9 and was ready for battle.
“5!” Ryosuke revved his engine; it was as responsive as ever.
“4!” The Ek9 driver pulled his E-brake.
“3!” both drivers revved hard.
“2!"
"1!!”
The Civic got its tires warmed up in the first half second of the race, and it launched faster than Ryosuke’s Skyline, they approached the first hairpin, the opposing driver used a highly advanced left foot braking technique to stabilize his FF Civic, this allowed him to whip around the first hairpin with amazing speed. The four-wheel drift worked well for Ryosuke but, he didn’t use enough power to whip him all the way around the corner, Ryosuke caught up in the straights, but it seemed like the Ek9 wasn’t using all of its power to get away. The first eight hairpins were behind them now, and Ryosuke was getting afraid to hit the gas too early to drift, crashing was not an option. He got over his fear and did it anyways, his foot accidentally hit his brake and clutch at the same time, this shifted a lot of weight to the front of his Skyline and his car did a 180 in the middle of the road. If you have ever seen Irohazaka you know that if you could get sideways quick enough, you would jump right onto the road below.
The R31 GTS-X Skyline flew from the road atop and landed in front of the Ek9, Ryosuke was in a temporary state of shock resulting from his accidental maneuver and did not try it again on the next hairpin, The Ek6 however, did. The Ek9 driver wrenched his e-brake, the Civic flung around the corner, landing right beside Ryosuke. Seeing that the Ek9 was on the outside corner Ryosuke tried the tricky maneuver again on the hairpin; it worked, he did it very sloppily though, the Ek9 was at his gas cap, but let off to avoid a collision. Ryosuke performed the spectacular maneuver repeatedly; the Civic appeared to have practiced this though.
Thankfully, Ryosuke’s tires were holding up quite fine, and he could easily perform the hairpin jump throughout the run, this battle was going to be decided in the long straight for sure. Pop! The Ek9 backfired; it pulled right up beside Ryosuke and passed him in the straight, Ryosuke was shocked, Akagi must have paid top dollar for a turbo with motorized adjustable lades, the Ek9 must have just rotated the Turbo’s turbine’s to make them spin, giving him at least 90horsepower more! The Ek9 slowly pulled away from Ryosuke’s R31 GTS-X.
“What a sneaky trick, no one beats me on my home course, especially not a cheating outsider!”
The Nissan Skyline R31 GTS-X, is considerably more heavy than any Ek9, meaning more inertia and longer drifts. As soon as the pair got to the long downhill with the few gentle corners, Ryosuke powered out, he got every kilometer/hour out of his gears. The upcoming and final bridge had only enough room for two compact cars mirror to mirror without scraping the side rails and a dip before and after its length.
When the two racers entered the last corner before the first dip, Ryosuke drifted, a long hard drift around the corner to the inside, he managed to get his headlights alongside the Ek9’s. Ryosuke was in 4th gear of 5 gears, with 1500rpm’s to spare (he could rev 1500 rpm's before he hit his redline) he decided to put his brain to work; While trying to jam his accelerator to the floor, his R31 GTS-X Skyline went airborne over the dip, his rpm's were at the redline, his tires were spinning 150kmhs while drifting in the air, his tires were hot and sticky and when they touched the pavement, this instant grip and increased tire speed shot Ryosuke's front fender right in front of the Ek9, his driver side door was within 5cm of the Ek9’s headlamp.
“This kid is insane, but I’m not letting him pass me,” The Ek9 driver said to himself.
Ryosuke up-shifted, the millisecond of turbo lag was all it took to get his tires grip; He quickly pulled in front of the Ek9, just in time for the second dip to send them both airborne. The race was decided, there was never any passing after the bridge, Ryosuke had won.
“Resolution?”
Andrew said "I've never seen such amazing drifting, the footage from the cameras that Akagi’s team had set up were wirelessly linked together and projected onto the side of a white van we all saw the whole race!" then added "Oh yeah, i signed us up for some basic classes at the colloge..." Ryosuke was going to scream but sadi instead "Ok, i will take some classes with you," Within a few months Ryosuke was living in his own apartment had apologized to his father and had been independant.
“Hey, are you Ryosuke Nakazato? I have heard about your accomplishments, how about you join a team that is pretty new, all about competition with the best drivers."
FRESHMAN STUDENT GRADED
Story by:
Bailey Groutage
Ms. Gordon, Period 1
“The Fight”
“You can’t just take away my agency!” Ryosuke shouted. Ryosuke Nakazato was a teenager of 18 years, 1.89 meters, 76 kilos; He had a slim body, oval shaped face, not chubby at all, and fair, even skin tone for being Japanese. His eyes had this extreme deepness to them, but behind the wheel of his RB25det powered Nissan Skyline R31 GTS-X he was a man of instinct and endurance. His father replied” Ryosuke, when you live here you can’t be a leech! You have graduated high school and you only have a Two hundred fifty thousand Yen in the bank,” (1 dollar is equal to 120.5 Japanese Yen, so Ryosuke has $2000) Ryosuke walked into the small kitchen and rinsed his hands, then in a normal tone
“I don’t need a bank statement, Dad” then under his breath he said “screw this, I’m leaving”
“Go then, you are never going to get anything because you won’t shape up, get a job and get an education.”
Ryosuke gathered his clothes and a few belongings, smashed them into his backpack.
“It’s not like I need you to survive, you always tell me the Nakazato family thrives, and I won’t waste my time sitting around here.” With that, Ryosuke popped his trunk chucked in his practice tires and left his dad in a cloud of tire smoke. The smoke looked very white because it was -3oC on this cold November morning at the base of the Irohazaka touge.
“The Runaway Boy”
From Ryosuke’s dwelling, it was about 8 kilometers to the local American’s house. Andrew Miller: 22 years, 1.86 meters, 80 kilos; he had a long face complimented with a strong jaw and large brown eyes hidden behind large, thick framed rectangular glasses, makes fun of little kids, works a full time job as a physicist’s apprentice, and drives a Nissan/Kids Heart Sileighty (pronounced: sill-ay-tee) with a cat back exhaust and carbon clutch and crankshaft, (Sileightys came equipped with a specially tuned SR20det). When Ryosuke arrived at Andrew’s house, his Sileighty wasn’t in his driveway, Ryosuke was about to leave when he heard an SR20det amplified by a large exhaust. Andrew was conservative with his tires and slowed gently like any normal driver.
“How’s it going Ryosuke?” Andrew said in Japanese, Andrew knew very little Japanese, but Ryosuke was fluent in English and Japanese thanks to Japan’s hard schooling.
“Uh… not so good, I kind of, um, kicked myself out of the house. My Dad says I need a job and extra schooling. Do you mind if I stay here a while? I thought I could make some money racing and doing odd jobs for people.”
“I won’t mind if you stay. You know you can’t make money racing! Actually, you are in luck; my parents just fired this person from their mineral spa in the mountain. He was looking in the women’s spas.” Then Andrew added, “Finally you put the RB25det in your R31 GTS-X, I heard it when I was coming up. You’re a little run away”
“I guess.”
“The Job”
Ryosuke actually liked his job at the hot spring; it was not as boring as he had thought it was going to be. Folding towels, checking temperature levels, adjusting water flow and assisting men and women who were lost or needed help reaching something. Though his first day was uneventful, he enjoyed the interaction with others, and the fact that he was proving his Dad wrong.
“Ryosuke!” Mrs. Miller chimed, “Your shift is over you can go home, you were great hun’, Andrew was right about something,”
“Thank you Mrs. Miller, I actually enjoyed working today.” Ryosuke got into his Skyline and took a grip run down Irohazaka’s one-way road, these were the same hairpins that he had done in Andrew’s car when he was sixteen not a legal driver. Now that he had gone to driving school and gotten his license, he could drive and own in his own car legally.
“Nighttime Touge”
Irohazaka was especially active tonight, the Akagi driving team was here to find the best racer, and set a new time on Irohazaka’s 20+ hairpins. When Ryosuke and Andrew arrived at the top of the Mountain Pass (Touge in Japanese), they saw that the Akagi Team had selected a driver that Ryosuke knew he could beat easily. He got out of his car and asked the leader to a one on one Touge Battle (race)
“Can you beat this guyre, kid?”
“Andrew, thank you for coming, I was the best one here but now that you arrived, kick their Akagi butts!”
“I suppose I could,” Ryosuke said and then added coldly, “You too”
“OK sir, we weren’t looking for trouble, we want to do a downhill run and since this is a one way road, we should do the lead/follow startup. We will lead if you don’t mind. If we get away, we win, if you pass us you win. We will switch spots after every run.”
“Ok, that sounds fair, but I need to get my tires from… well never mind, whoever said drifting was slow?” Ryosuke added cheerfully, he was glad that they were respectful.
“The Race”
Ryosuke was ready for the battle, work had refreshed him and he was all for a little butt whooping. He wiped down his engine and cleaned out his exhaust pipe, he did not want any backup or lost power from clogged exhaust. The other team was beginning to line up; he would be battling a red Ek9 civic, the engine sounded very powerful, even though it was running a factory stock exhaust pipe.
“Ryosuke, are you ready to own them? Remember what we practiced. Get it as far sideways as the corners exit, power out.” This was Andrew’s pep talk for Ryosuke and it made sense considering they had been practicing four-wheel drifts the last two months. Ryosuke pulled up behind this red Civic Ek9 and was ready for battle.
“5!” Ryosuke revved his engine; it was as responsive as ever.
“4!” The Ek9 driver pulled his E-brake.
“3!” both drivers revved hard.
“2!"
"1!!”
The Civic got its tires warmed up in the first half second of the race, and it launched faster than Ryosuke’s Skyline, they approached the first hairpin, the opposing driver used a highly advanced left foot braking technique to stabilize his FF Civic, this allowed him to whip around the first hairpin with amazing speed. The four-wheel drift worked well for Ryosuke but, he didn’t use enough power to whip him all the way around the corner, Ryosuke caught up in the straights, but it seemed like the Ek9 wasn’t using all of its power to get away. The first eight hairpins were behind them now, and Ryosuke was getting afraid to hit the gas too early to drift, crashing was not an option. He got over his fear and did it anyways, his foot accidentally hit his brake and clutch at the same time, this shifted a lot of weight to the front of his Skyline and his car did a 180 in the middle of the road. If you have ever seen Irohazaka you know that if you could get sideways quick enough, you would jump right onto the road below.
The R31 GTS-X Skyline flew from the road atop and landed in front of the Ek9, Ryosuke was in a temporary state of shock resulting from his accidental maneuver and did not try it again on the next hairpin, The Ek6 however, did. The Ek9 driver wrenched his e-brake, the Civic flung around the corner, landing right beside Ryosuke. Seeing that the Ek9 was on the outside corner Ryosuke tried the tricky maneuver again on the hairpin; it worked, he did it very sloppily though, the Ek9 was at his gas cap, but let off to avoid a collision. Ryosuke performed the spectacular maneuver repeatedly; the Civic appeared to have practiced this though.
Thankfully, Ryosuke’s tires were holding up quite fine, and he could easily perform the hairpin jump throughout the run, this battle was going to be decided in the long straight for sure. Pop! The Ek9 backfired; it pulled right up beside Ryosuke and passed him in the straight, Ryosuke was shocked, Akagi must have paid top dollar for a turbo with motorized adjustable lades, the Ek9 must have just rotated the Turbo’s turbine’s to make them spin, giving him at least 90horsepower more! The Ek9 slowly pulled away from Ryosuke’s R31 GTS-X.
“What a sneaky trick, no one beats me on my home course, especially not a cheating outsider!”
The Nissan Skyline R31 GTS-X, is considerably more heavy than any Ek9, meaning more inertia and longer drifts. As soon as the pair got to the long downhill with the few gentle corners, Ryosuke powered out, he got every kilometer/hour out of his gears. The upcoming and final bridge had only enough room for two compact cars mirror to mirror without scraping the side rails and a dip before and after its length.
When the two racers entered the last corner before the first dip, Ryosuke drifted, a long hard drift around the corner to the inside, he managed to get his headlights alongside the Ek9’s. Ryosuke was in 4th gear of 5 gears, with 1500rpm’s to spare (he could rev 1500 rpm's before he hit his redline) he decided to put his brain to work; While trying to jam his accelerator to the floor, his R31 GTS-X Skyline went airborne over the dip, his rpm's were at the redline, his tires were spinning 150kmhs while drifting in the air, his tires were hot and sticky and when they touched the pavement, this instant grip and increased tire speed shot Ryosuke's front fender right in front of the Ek9, his driver side door was within 5cm of the Ek9’s headlamp.
“This kid is insane, but I’m not letting him pass me,” The Ek9 driver said to himself.
Ryosuke up-shifted, the millisecond of turbo lag was all it took to get his tires grip; He quickly pulled in front of the Ek9, just in time for the second dip to send them both airborne. The race was decided, there was never any passing after the bridge, Ryosuke had won.
“Resolution?”
Andrew said "I've never seen such amazing drifting, the footage from the cameras that Akagi’s team had set up were wirelessly linked together and projected onto the side of a white van we all saw the whole race!" then added "Oh yeah, i signed us up for some basic classes at the colloge..." Ryosuke was going to scream but sadi instead "Ok, i will take some classes with you," Within a few months Ryosuke was living in his own apartment had apologized to his father and had been independant.
“Hey, are you Ryosuke Nakazato? I have heard about your accomplishments, how about you join a team that is pretty new, all about competition with the best drivers."