Dave I Keep telling you to look at how other people on the forum drift and try to learn from it. you technique is getting a little better... but... the ebrake entry and lack of control over the car while it drifts is still very evident...
Here is a video UKO made of me drifting on that same track. diff car but you get the idea of the sort of line, flow and speed your drifts should have. hope it helps