Nemesis55
here it is updated
Get ready for a long-winded list of "tips." Not intended to offend...
You're getting a little closer with your title typeface, although the gradient treatment doesn't add anything -- it actually makes the end of "Mans" dissapear into the BG.
Try letting your margins "breathe" a little. If something isn't going to bleed off the edge of the page, give it a comfortable space from the edge. Pushing your type to very edge like that makes the page look haphazard and works against the flow you are trying to build.
Don't be afraid to vary the size of your type, and to use contrasting typefaces. Doing so gives a more dynamic look to the page and can give emphasis to certain words or phrases. That said, resist the temptation to go "font crazy." Two or three(at most) typefaces is all you need. Any more and they all begin to work against each other.
I don't know what software you're using, but if you can, try working at a higher resolution, and bring the final image down to 72 dpi as your last step. Your type looks pretty jaggy and fuzzy. Try to keep your type as crisp as possible by leaving it "unrendered" and just changing the point size in your type pallate. Also, when you are making your final jpeg, don't compress it too much, as that will distort things and add image artifacts. in Photoshop, putting the jpeg compression slider @ about 10 is usually good.
You need some kind of treatment to seperate the photos at the bottom from the background. This could be anything from simple white lines to a detailed photoshop frame of some kind. The sense of seperation from the main image is what you're after.
Last but certanly not least: Alignment. Try aligning your elements to each other/things in your photos with the idea of giving the page a good sense of structure. Aligning everything to the page center is for wedding invites and cheesy ads, so avoid that. Leaving everything floating around makes the page look thrown together, and hurts flow as well.
Hope I've given you some useful information. Oh one more thing, keep playing until it's not fun anymore, and then take a break -- there's nothing worse than fighting yourself if you don't have to.