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Amazing!
Speechless...
This story has almost inspired me to write a new story myself.
Just noticed you and Ahmad wrote it together (didn't saw the red letters below the title!). Nice story so far, guys. 👍 Many parents dying lately on this subforum.
Why can't I write something as popular? It's a good story though, and I look forward to seeing young Mr. Parker's first race. 👍
Why can't I write something as popular? It's a good story though, and I look forward to seeing young Mr. Parker's first race. 👍
Maybe because, we both base our stories in Japan.
InvincibleGT's is based in the U.K.
Nenad's,
Maybe because, we both base our stories in Japan.
This is exactly the reason I will not comment in any story based mainly in Japan. It gets old, very quickly.
Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter, Nenad and Ahmad. 👍
EDIT: Reading new chapter.
EDIT 2: Nice, realism (something that isn't present in this subforum lately). 👍 I feel identified with Jake, though I haven't done my exam yet. I like that you are bolding the names, otherwise, it gets fuzzy. 👍 One question, though. £9.000 to get a driver's license?
Jake: I'm in it for the money, basically.
In terms of criticism, I'll be blunt. English isn't your strong point, is it? It just makes the characters seem to act somewhat like robots at times, and incredibly confrontational at others... on top of your portrayal of England being a bit off, but hey, it's fiction 👍
But I can say that the story premise is actually quite intriguing. Story set in England, and you're using an E-Type Jag, possibly the last car on Earth I'd think of to star in a race report I'm interested to see how it pans out.
Seeing as it's set in England you could make it very realistic by giving Jake a crappy French hatchback and a Nike tracksuit.